Could someone read this for me?

[Chris Perkins]

Attached to this post is the current back cover text for the forthcoming Check Your Change.

Before I finalise it, could someone, or more than one person read it through to check for spelling, puntuation etc problems?

Thanks,

[scottishmoney]

Looks good

[Geordie582]

Can't find anything wrong at all. If there is something, then my Tech Author skills have evaporated!

[Chris Perkins]

I'll give myself a pat on the back then!

I only got a D at English GCSE. But I think that was due to the feminine distractions Chloe and Victoria that sat in the row in front of me. I'm no Shakespeare, but I'm certainly better now!

[scottishmoney]

Were Chloe and Victoria coin collectors?

[Chris Perkins]

Yes, they were leggy specialists in the Joseph Moore model coinage of Queen Victoria!

No, they weren't really!

Vicky is a bit of cow since she got married the other year, I think her husband is a bit strange and won't allow her any friends. Chloe has a 10 year old son and a casual boyfriend.

[Rob]

Vicky is a bit of cow since she got married the other year, I think her husband is a bit strange and won't allow her any friends.

That doesn't bode well for the future.

[Chris Perkins]

I'll be standing by!

[Emperor Oli]

In the first paragraph:

"The main aim of CYC is to inform the public about the special coins and banknotes that they might find in their change! From the error 2p worth £500 to the rare serial number prefixes for all current circulating banknotes."

That second sentence doesn't sound right on its own to me, I'd run it on from the first or says something like

"From the error 2p worth £500 to the rare serial number prefixes for all current circulating banknotes, a plethora of delights await you"

...but obviously better than that.

[Chris Perkins]

I think it'll have to stay as it is, unless you can come up with something better than "a plethora of delights await you"!

[josie]

How about any feedback and question about this book you can inquire at www.predecimal.com forum in interactive way.

[Geordie582]

But I think that was due to the feminine distractions Chloe and Victoria that sat in the row in front of me.

I had a similar experience at school when the two leggy blonds in front of me wriggled about a lot and didn't seem to notice their skirts didn't always follow their movements. Possibly why my school reports always included "must concentrate more". Believe it or not, they were twins with the surname Venus!

[Red Riley]

Attached to this post is the current back cover text for the forthcoming Check Your Change.

Before I finalise it, could someone, or more than one person read it through to check for spelling, puntuation etc problems?

Thanks,

You're going to wish you hadn't asked this! Despite my use of it in the previous sentence, I think you should strike the exclamation mark after 'change' in the second line; you have one later on in the paragraph and overuse of exclamation marks just doesn't look professional (sorry, but that's my opinion). Agree that the second sentence needs a little more, as it rather ends in mid air - how about adding something like: 'which can make them worth treble/quadruple/ten times/whatever their face value'. You will also need to switch the word 'colour' in the 2nd line of 2nd para. i.e. 'actual-size colour illustrations'. The only other adjustment that you could make (and this sounds picky) is to end the third paragraph after 'books' with a colon.

Otherwise fine.

Do I get a free copy?

[Chris Perkins]

I had a similar experience at school when the two leggy blonds in front of me wriggled about a lot and didn't seem to notice their skirts didn't always follow their movements. Possibly why my school reports always included "must concentrate more". Believe it or not, they were twins with the surname Venus!

Amazing how the same things happen generation after generation. That sounds exactly like my situation, except they were both brunettes at the time and weren't twins. They did say they were cousins and I know their dads drunk in the pub together.

I sat next to Chloe in Science because one day the teacher asked sarcastically where I would like to sit, and I told him. He thought it would be a good idea because she was rubbish at science and I was pretty good. She's still grateful now that I was able to dissect the ox's eye and sheeps heart instead of her, and that I helped her get some kind of GCSE grade when she probably wouldn't have got one at all otherwise.

Red Riley: Thanks, I'll change those bits. Good comments.

[Colin G.]

Attached to this post is the current back cover text for the forthcoming Check Your Change.

Before I finalise it, could someone, or more than one person read it through to check for spelling, puntuation etc problems?

Thanks,

You're going to wish you hadn't asked this! Despite my use of it in the previous sentence, I think you should strike the exclamation mark after 'change' in the second line; you have one later on in the paragraph and overuse of exclamation marks just doesn't look professional (sorry, but that's my opinion). Agree that the second sentence needs a little more, as it rather ends in mid air - how about adding something like: 'which can make them worth treble/quadruple/ten times/whatever their face value'. You will also need to switch the word 'colour' in the 2nd line of 2nd para. i.e. 'actual-size colour illustrations'. The only other adjustment that you could make (and this sounds picky) is to end the third paragraph after 'books' with a colon.

Otherwise fine.

Do I get a free copy?

Red,

My posts must look very amateur because I know I over use exclamation marks all the time, my site is full of them!!! (oops done it again!! )(and again )

[Red Riley]

Red,

My posts must look very amateur because I know I over use exclamation marks all the time, my site is full of them!!! (oops done it again!! )(and again )

[Chris Perkins]

Yes, but what you can do on a forum and what you should do on a book are quite different!!!!

Most of all......I hate what seems to be more an american tend......whereby people write things with lots of full stops linking bits up..........as if they are speaking, or as if the don't really know where to put full stops and commas.

[Geoff T]

Attached to this post is the current back cover text for the forthcoming Check Your Change.

Before I finalise it, could someone, or more than one person read it through to check for spelling, puntuation etc problems?

Thanks,

The second sentence "From the error 2p..." isn't a sentence. You need to scrap the preceding exclamation mark, replace it with a comma and make the "f" in "From" lower case.

Shame on the rest of you for not spotting this. Teach kids Mandarin - I don't know!

Geoff

[Chris Perkins]

Why'd you have to come in with your wisdom about 5 mins after I'd emailed the designer with what we both thought were final changes!

I've emailed him again with that last thing. (thanks)

[Emperor Oli]

Attached to this post is the current back cover text for the forthcoming Check Your Change.

Before I finalise it, could someone, or more than one person read it through to check for spelling, puntuation etc problems?

Thanks,

The second sentence "From the error 2p..." isn't a sentence. You need to scrap the preceding exclamation mark, replace it with a comma and make the "f" in "From" lower case.

Shame on the rest of you for not spotting this. Teach kids Mandarin - I don't know!

Geoff

I'll just add that I suggested a change earlier but was brushed away. Something a little different, but a change nonetheless

[Chris Perkins]

You'll continue to be brushed aside until you're as old as Geoff and have a respectable beard like his! That's just a fact of life.

[Emperor Oli]

You'll continue to be brushed aside until you're as old as Geoff and have a respectable beard like his! That's just a fact of life.

Probably true

[Geordie582]

Edited February 13, 2007 by Geordie582